Direct Mail 03: The Message

In the previous two segments of this series wethe link you came to a pitch page that has a
mentioned methods of contacting potentialheadline and a list of benefits.
customers by classified and print ads and also theIf you provided enough information including your
stationary used in direct mail contact including thetelephone number, you could get a free copy of a
use of postcards. In this article we give somepopular book plus access to the main sales pitch.
hints on what is called copywriting or the art ofI didn't give my telephone number so I didn't get
selling your stuff.the free book (which I've read a hundred times)
You will need to think about what you write innor did I get to the sales page.
your advertising and in your print and classifiedThe reason I was not given access to the free
ads. There are many books on copywritingbook and even the sales page is because the site
available in libraries and at very low prices on thefilters the respondents to the ad. It cuts out
internet (Amazon.com, Alibris.com,those without telephones and those not willing to
BarnesandNoble.com, etc.).share telephone information.
For your direct mail or mail order business you willIt also filters out some potential customers, but
need copy for your ads, your web pages, andthat is a chance the site owner is willing to take.
your direct mail bundle or package.More and more site owners are doing this type of
Here are some hints to help you in your writing,filtering.
but there may come the time that you don'tIn mail order you can filter by asking for a couple
want to perform this function because you areof bucks shipping and handling for more
too busy counting your money (but don't bet oninformation. An alternative is to ask for a couple
it). That may be the time to hire a professionalof stamps or a SASE.
copywriter.Look at the pitch for a free book at Before you
Classified Adsget to the main page the writer tries to capture
Classified ads are sold by the word. Usually thereyour email address but he let's you go to his
is a minimum charge for perhaps 15 or 25 words.free-book page even if you give him no
If you get the thought in your head I must useinformation.
only 15 words you are in self-defeating mode.The free-book page has a headline, benefits, and
You have placed an unnecessary restriction ontestimonies of happy readers. To get the book
yourself.free, you just click.
A few more words can often improve theThe book is called The Ultimate SuperTip. It's a
response to your ad and it cost only a fraction.PDF file that you can save to your desk top that
more than the 15 words or 25 words ad. If yourwill hopefully entice you into his money-making
ad fails to get your point across, you are dead insystem.
the water.Giving something away for free is a great way to
You need a headline for your ad. This is true of aconvince customers to read your material.
small classified ad and a full-page ad. The headlineRemember these things in your sales copy:
MUST give a BENEFIT to the potential buyer.Write to your friend, Charlie
A benefit is something like Get Rich Fast withoutWhat I mean here is act like you have known the
Going Broke First!recipient from the time you were both in
The following is not a benefit: The Slam-Po 3kindergarten. Be casual in your approach. You are
comes in red, green, and purple. That describes abringing new, exciting information to Charlie who is
property (the color) of the product but not ayour good friend.
benefit.Now, don't start your letter Dear, Charlie, because
A classified ad gives little room for more than onethat will get you nowhere fast. Try something like
or two benefits. The fact that your contactDear Future Money Maker:
information takes up a good part of the adUse Testimonials
doesn't help. That's why many operators just giveA testimonial stating that your product or service
a telephone number or website as the contactis just wonderful is a gold mine. Collect these
information.testimonials when they come to you. Ask for
That is also why many operators also use postalpermission to use them. Edit them into idiomatic
mailbox addresses. Box 32A, Slamdunk, AR 12345English with decent grammar but don't hide the
is shorter thanmessage nor the tone in which it was given.
The "A" in Box 32A or PO 32A or PO Box 32A isWhen I say idiomatic English I mean the way
a "key" that reveals to the operator thepeople actually talk.
publication the ad appeared in. Any of the aboveLet's say that you get a testimonial that reads:
designation will cause the mail to be delivered toI got yur kit stuff and I did wat ya said and I
Post Office Box 32 because that is the way themade $270.00 the first day selling stuff to my
United States Postal Service operates.relations and friends.
Certain words "pull" in ads better than others.Do a few repairs on this testimonial:
Here they are:I got your sales kit, did what you said, and earned
Absolutely, Amazing, Approved, Attractive,$270.00 my first day selling to my relations and
Authentic,friends.
Bargain, Beautiful, Better, Big, Colorful, Colossal,Testimonials are like spice. Don't over do it and, if
Complete, Confidential, Crammed, Delivered,possible, make sure that each one states a
Direct,different benefit.
Discount, Easily, Endorsed, Enormous, Excellent,Never ever fake testimonials.
Exciting,Use Common Words and Phrases, Vary Sentence
Exclusive, Expert, Famous, Fascinating, Fortune,Length, Stick to the Point, Dump Verbiage
Free, Full,Stay away from flowery language, big words that
Genuine, Gift, Gigantic, Greatest, Guaranteed,most people don't know, and "cute" wording.
Helpful,Remember, you are talking to your friend, Charlie,
Highest, Huge, Immediately, Improved,across the fence.
Informative,Avoid long, complex sentences. But do vary the
Instructive, Interesting, Largest, Latest, Lavishly,length of your sentences.
Liberal, Lifetime, Limited, Lowest, Magic,Sometimes you need adjectives and adverbs. An
Mammoth,adjective modifies a noun. An adverb modifies an
Miracle, New, Noted, Odd, Outstanding,adjective or another adverb. Drop non-effective
Personalized, Popular,modifiers. They slow down the reader and don't
Powerful, Practical, Professional, Profitable,cut to the quick. If you wonder if a modifier is
Profusely,needed just remove them from the sentence
Proven, Quality, Quickly, Rare, Reduced,and decide which is most effective. For example:
Refundable,The big mean brown dog jumped over the white
Remarkable, Reliable, Revealing, Revolutionary,picket fence.
Scarce,The angry dog jumped the picket fence.
Secrets, Security, Selected, Sensational, Simplified,Which sentence did you like best?
Sizable, Special, Startling, Strange, Strong, Sturdy,A Long Letter Is Often Better Than A Short One
Successful, Superior, Surprise, Terrific, Tested,If you read the sales pitch on an Internet site it
Tremendous, Unconditional, Unique, Unlimited,goes on and on and on. Direct mail pieces often
Unparalleled,have a very long letter to describe all the
Unsurpassed, Unusual, Useful, Valuable, Wealth,advantages and benefits of the product or
Weird, and Wonderful.service and to remove objections to buying that
Read the classified ads and gather a collection ofthe reader might have in his or her mind.
the best ads and print ads you can find. They willYou have plenty of room on a web page or in a
greatly help you write your ads.direct mail piece, so why skimp? Just don't' start
Mail order operators know they must key andrepeating yourself. When you have said what
test ads to optimize performance (response). Ifneeds to be said you don't have to embellish it.
you do not do this and are successful, you areLet your sales copy sit a while and then come
just lucky. You need to minimize luck andback to it. Let your spouse read it and your good
maximize the performance of your ads.friend. See what they think. Okay, ask your old
Print AdsEnglish teacher to take a look at it. Edit and polish
Print ads give you room to expand. A full page aduntil it is near perfect in your opinion.
allows you to completely describe your product orRemember that you want to generate
service and provide an order form. You can evenexcitement and the urge to buy.
include a pic or two of your product.You want the potential customer to feel awful if
See the topics below to help you write your copy.he fails to buy. You want him to think that he will
The Powerful Mail Order Package or Internet Pagebe "missing out" and not enjoying the benefits of
If your classified ad leads your prospectiveyour product or service.
customer to your direct mail package or to yourUse Color
website, you are in business. There is a high rateColor is free on the Internet. It cost extra in
of return on solicited information. That is, if the addirect mail packages including letters and
reader asks for more information you've got itbrochures. A touch of color can go a long way.
made in the shade. That is IF YOUR COPY SELLS.You probably have seen little notes in blue ink in
Go to a few web sites that are trying to sell yousales letters.
something. Here is an ad found on the GoogleA full-color or 4-color brochure can be very
Search Results when I put in the words get richeffective in describing your product or service. A
book:short letter, the brochure, an order form, and a
Make Money Guaranteedreturn envelope can be very effective. Printers
Don't spend big money on Scamswill often help you create a brochure because
I found 3 proven home money makersthey want your print business.
This ad was a sponsored link on the right side ofWhat? After all of that you have no product or
the search results. The sponsor paid to have hisservice to sale? Well, what can you do to find or
ad come up when the words get rich book werecreate a product or service? That will be in the
placed in the Google search box. If you clicked onnext segment.